Silverfang and Nighttail~warriors of TreeClan

[Cloudfur]

name: silverfang

gender: female

origin: clan cat

age: 18 moons

clan: treeclan

position: warrior

sibllings: nighttail and cloudfur

appearence: silver with emerald green eyes

history: Mother and father in thunderclan and vows to love no one

personality: mid big ego. mainly only kind to cloudfur and parents, also friends

Role play: Silverfang was fighting with her apprentice, stormpaw when stormpaw pinned her down. "nice job." she said "thanks." Stormpaw padded to the edge of the clearing. "It's time you were made a warrior."

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[Cloudfur]

name: nighttail

gender: she-cat

age: 18 moons

origin: clan cat

position: warrior

clan: treeclan

mate: can't decide on one

appearence: pitch black with green eyes

history: mother and father i thunderclan. can't settle down with a mate.

personality: major mood swings(one day she's your friend next day she's not). loyal.

role play: Nightpaw stalked away. She had, had a fight with her sister again! She padded up the the river and stopped dead. a young riverclan aprentice was stalking a vole! She yowled and the aprentice looked around. She looked 2 moons younger than nightpaw. nightpaw yowled again and the aprentice fled. She had chased off her first enemy!

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First of all- PLEASE use proper grammar. Capital letters where needed, full sentences, et cetera.
All of your sections except IC need to be longer. Physical Description and Personality should be at least three lines long. History needs to be at least four.
Your history also isn't exactly history-like. It should tell what went on in your cat's life. You can put in their mother/father/siblings if you like, but you also need to say what happened to them. You can include whether or not they have a mate in their history, but you also need a seperate section for that.
Night-tail's name should hyphonated. All warrior names where the prefix (Say, Reed-) and the suffix, (say, -dance) are hyphonated (Thus, my example name would be Reed-dance). I believe that kit names are the only names which are not hyphonated. Apprentice names... I'm not sure about. I believe they are.
Lastly, Night-tail's picture is the same as Ravenfeather's. Cats don't have twins, as Inky said, so you need to change one of their pictures.

Mmkays. I think that's everything.

[Cloudfur]

Can't get to fixing this now! In a rush! Change the pic for nighttail. Bye